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Language guru: Obama speech too 'professorial' for his target audience
2010-06-17
(CNN) -- President Obama's speech on the gulf oil disaster may have gone over the heads of many in his audience, according to an analysis of the 18-minute talk released Wednesday.

Tuesday night's speech from the Oval Office of the White House was written to a 9.8 grade level, said Paul J.J. Payack, president of Global Language Monitor. The Austin, Texas-based company analyzes and catalogues trends in word usage and word choice and their impact on culture.

Though the president used slightly less than four sentences per paragraph, his 19.8 words per sentence "added some difficulty for his target audience," Payack said.

He singled out this sentence from Obama as unfortunate: "That is why just after the rig sank, I assembled a team of our nation's best scientists and engineers to tackle this challenge -- a team led by Dr. Steven Chu, a Nobel Prize-winning physicist and our nation's secretary of energy."

"A little less professorial, less academic and more ordinary," Payack recommended. "That's the type of phraseology that makes you (appear) aloof and out of touch."
Who added the word "appear"?
The monitor's chief word analyst found these three sentences insensitive: "Already, this oil spill is the worst environmental disaster America has ever faced. And unlike an earthquake or a hurricane, it is not a single event that does its damage in a matter of minutes or days. The millions of gallons of oil that have spilled into the Gulf of Mexico are more like an epidemic, one that we will be fighting for months and even years."

"You shouldn't be saying that in Katrina land," said Payack, referring to the 2005 hurricane that devastated the Gulf Coast. "New Orleans lost a third of its population; it's still recovering."

But he praised Obama's phrase "oil began spewing" as active and graphic.

At a micro level, the average word in the speech contained 4.5 letters, a bit longer than is typical for the former constitutional law professor, Payack said.

Obama's nearly 10th-grade-level rating was the highest of any of his major speeches and well above the Grade 7.4 of his 2008 "Yes, we can" victory speech, which many consider his best effort, Payack said.

"The scores indicate that this was not Obama at his best, especially when attempting to make an emotional connection to the American people," he added.
Posted by:gorb

#10  Actually he never finished the 9th grade so he did quite will. All the rest of his paperwork is fake. He should have just held his middle finger up to the camera. We all would have understood that.
Posted by: Chief   2010-06-17 21:02  

#9  More like this speech:

"The symptoms of this crisis of the American spirit are all around us. For the first time in the history of our country a majority of our people believe that the next 5 years will be worse than the past 5 years. Two-thirds of our people do not even vote. The productivity of American workers is actually dropping, and the willingness of Americans to save for the future has fallen below that of all other people in the Western world.

As you know, there is a growing disrespect for government and for churches and for schools, the news media, and other institutions. This is not a message of happiness or reassurance, but it is the truth and it is a warning".
Posted by: DMFD   2010-06-17 20:42  

#8  #6 Me Barack. Me boss. You little people, and stupid. Me fix this, you watch. You pay.
Posted by KBK


...den I "kick you ass" an suck your through a soda straw.... an, an, an..... Rham, what do I says nex?
Posted by: Besoeker   2010-06-17 17:05  

#7  Elsewhere I've read that President George W. Bush's speeches were written at a consistently higher grade level than President Obama's. Perhaps in this, too, President Obama has swung round to agree with his predecessor.
Posted by: trailing wife   2010-06-17 14:09  

#6  Me Barack. Me boss. You little people, and stupid. Me fix this, you watch. You pay.
Posted by: KBK   2010-06-17 12:49  

#5  This evaluation says more about Mr. Payack and his bias than anything else.
Posted by: tipover   2010-06-17 12:29  

#4  Same as it ever was. If you don't support Barry, you're a racist. If you don't back the liberal agenda, you're stupid. If you don't willingly accept higher taxes, you're greedy. Got it.
Posted by: Jefferson   2010-06-17 12:24  

#3  I wonder how Mr. Payack would have graded this speech. Of course, this was an actual speech by an actual President.

Behind me stands a wall that encircles the free sectors of this city, part of a vast system of barriers that divides the entire continent of Europe. From the Baltic, south, those barriers cut across Germany in a gash of barbed wire, concrete, dog runs, and guard towers. Farther south, there may be no visible, no obvious wall. But there remain armed guards and checkpoints all the same--still a restriction on the right to travel, still an instrument to impose upon ordinary men and women the will of a totalitarian state. Yet it is here in Berlin where the wall emerges most clearly; here, cutting across your city, where the news photo and the television screen have imprinted this brutal division of a continent upon the mind of the world. Standing before the Brandenburg Gate, every man is a German, separated from his fellow men. Every man is a Berliner, forced to look upon a scar.
...
After these four decades, then, there stands before the entire world one great and inescapable conclusion: Freedom leads to prosperity. Freedom replaces the ancient hatreds among the nations with comity and peace. Freedom is the victor.
...
General Secretary Gorbachev, if you seek peace, if you seek prosperity for the Soviet Union and Eastern Europe, if you seek liberalization: Come here to this gate! Mr. Gorbachev, open this gate! Mr. Gorbachev, tear down this wall!

Posted by: Matt   2010-06-17 09:14  

#2  Let me put this in a way that the typical Grade 7.4 level "Yes, we can" Obama voter will understand: Barack Hussein Obama is a doodoo head.
Posted by: ed   2010-06-17 08:49  

#1  Oh! So it wasn't all just Bull Sh*t.
I'm just too stupid to understand anything at a ninth grade level.
That makes me feel a lot better.

He had his TelePrompTer set way up there to 9.8. and I'm a Republican.
No wonder it sounded like Bull Sh*t!
Posted by: junkiron   2010-06-17 08:11  

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